User talk:Hakim10/sandbox

This is a really good start to your page! I like how you explained the role and function of telomeres and how they affect DNA and aging. A couple things you can add would be a little bit of an introduction like introducing where telomeres/DNA would be found in the cell or something simple like that. Also linking other wikipedia pages to yours will help the reader gain more information if they want by just clinking on the word you linked to the page. This helps them gain more information without you having to put it in your article. Other than that it looks really good! Shbau001 (talk) 14:34, 9 March 2017 (UTC)

Hey, this is a great start I think your describe the telomeres well. The second sentence to me reads a little funny (it could be just me) I think it would read better if it said "and to the loss of genetic information" instead of "losing genetic information". Also you could describe the shelterin complex more. (Yocha001 (talk) 23:51, 20 March 2017 (UTC))

I like what you added so far! I think the intro has a good flow to it and the words you linked will be very helpful for potential readers. For the progress portion of your article I think it has a good beginning. I would add maybe why the lack of reproduction in that type of mouse at the end of your first paragraph in this section causes them to have longer telomeres. Do they stop replicating cells as quickly or is it because they don't reproduce which means that their offspring are receiving longer telomeres? Also, reproduce is spelt wrong in the last sentence of the first paragraph. As for the whole section about the progress I would maybe add a little more information and maybe a couple different studies just to show the direction in which scientists are trying to study telomeres. Are they trying to continuously prove that this affects aging or are some of them trying to discredit it? Just a couple ideas. Good work! Shbau001 (talk) 22:48, 15 April 2017 (UTC)