User talk:Halenbutler123

I’m going to review the article entitled Clientelism.

The lead section greatly summarizes the main idea behind the practice of Clientelism. The key points of the article are to adequately explain this political system in simple terms to even go into the history of the method.

The structure of the article is very clear with the different sections having very different things to say about the subject. The group plans to expand on the lead section and add numerous tabs to better flesh out the practice of Clientelism

The content in each section never goes on for too long. They’re all to the point and have something pertinent to say.

The language is a good mix between professional and casual writing and there are no big generalizations are made throughout.

Everything that needs to be cited has a link attached or is cited.

All the references are valuable to the article and I think that everything that needs a source has one due to the article being to straightforward.

I would rate this group’s progress as a 4/5. This is due to the article being helped by adding different types of Clientelism and changing the tone from a positive one to a more realistic one.

I like that the group made the article more down to earth by making the practice less of a positive one. Clientelism is basically bribery after all.

The only two changes I would make to the article would be to give some examples of the practice occurring in the real world, as well as creating headings for the different sections to make the look more appealing.

These changes would result in an even better understanding of the practice and making the article easier on the eyes.