User talk:Hallegill/Indigenous People section of the Social impacts of COVID-19 in the U.S.

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 * First off, such an important contribution! Overall/global comment is you will want to maybe divide this up into mini subsections, perhaps? Below, some more style/citation comments:
 * "The COVID-19 pandemic was a devastating time for populations around the globe, but specifically for Indigenous settlements." this sentence isn't quite "encyclopedic" and you'd do better to simplify and get to the point: "The COVID-19 pandemic impacted Indigenous settlements (in the U.S.) particularly hard." or something more like this
 * 2nd sentence is "informal" the word you mean here?
 * Sources: err on the side of citing nearly every sentence even if this seems repetitive
 * 3rd sentence "As far as the physical impact of COVID-19 on Indigenous populations, " is also less encyclopedic in tone - transitions are not so much necessary here -- you can get to the point concisely and clearly.
 * 4th sentence "place on top of" is awkward and unclear- maybe revise?
 * (lost track of sentences) "swim in their own solace" could be simplified; "this quick-fix approach" also sounds kind of opinion driven so consider cutting and adding something after that sentence explaining that this offers an incomplete solution (hopefully with sources to back that up)
 * I think you're missing some sources such as from NAMI which you refer to? --- this is a big priority to address so that your content doesn't get flagged/removed for lack of substantiating sources!!