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This article presents feminist views on pornography. This article's aim is to inform audiences about Feminist views on Pornography; it will help define feminist pornography; both in the way it is viewed, what it entails and how it is understood.

The Workers The work of feminist pornography includes studying women, children and men in the industry. Some feminist are against pornography, because they believe it to be demeaning and degrading to many women and some men. Several view that pornography is used by men as a guide to hate, abuse and control women. [1] In the porn industry women of all types of body stature and race are hired to perform. These women are subjected to demeaning and inhumane acts of sexual, physical and emotional violence, forced to plaster a face of pleasure on as they get sodomized, grabbed and pounded heavily by the male performer. Many feminists view this negatively. Men in the porn industry, often the women’s partners are there to get the job done. The job may entail, slapping the woman around a bit with a whip or other toy on her behind or body. The job may also entail thrusting heavily into her behind or vaginal area. He may grasp her firmly and “pleasure” her until he ejaculates all over her face, hair and body. According to James D Griffith et al. male pornographer reportedly do the job for the money, sex and social interaction. From feminist points of view this is seen as dehumanizing to many women and some men. Children in the porn industry both girls and boys are exploited heavily in many other countries. [2] Feminist view child pornography very negatively, and this is one of the many reasons why feminist fight against the porn production. [2]

Hannah above, I have provided some editing suggestions above. I have also, provided some links to articles below that view feminist pornography as empowering and in a constructing manner. I suggest to include references that also speak of the positives of pornography for women to keep your article neutral. I hope this will help you with your article. http://ewu.worldcat.org/title/making-violence-sexy-feminist-views-on-pornography/oclc/91808732&referer=brief_results http://www.nytimes.com/roomfordebate/2012/11/11/does-pornography-deserve-its-bad-rap/pornography-can-be-empowering-to-women-on-screen http://www.salon.com/2009/11/06/feminism_and_playboy/ Nmunoz26 (talk) 05:23, 29 May 2013 (UTC)

Editing Suggestions' The article merely needs to be more concise, and straightforward. Here are my notes. Good start! don’t say this article here, the main section is to give a brief summary of the subject, its not an introduction to the rest of it. Look at other article’s formatting to see how they lay out their first section -don’t use adjectives! It implies non-neutrality. I took out words like “some”, “mandy” etc. - “*Men in the porn industry, often the women’s partner are there to get the job done” not neutral -don’t use the term job, what exactly are you talking about. You can say sex -overall I’m confused by this section…. Is this anti-porn view points? Is this contributing to the definition…? -Remember feminist is singular, feminists is plural. Watch out for that.

Overall, I suggest making sentences easier to follow, and to be aware of how your reader will read and understand the sentences and paragraphs. I found myself a bit confused in the middle. Perhaps more subsections would be helpful?

Bmiller (talk) 21:10, 30 May 2013 (UTC)