User talk:Hansonc1/sandbox

Peer Review of Contributions to American Burlesque Page
Looking at the wiki page "American Burlesque", the initial lead seems to be pretty strong, and I agree with your decision to add that section to the second paragraph. My only suggestion would be that maybe there also needs to be a history section on this page? Then the lead could remain as general information, while a history section could comprise of the more in depth historical info.

I think the structure of the page is otherwise well organized. The "Burlesque in America" section could maybe benefit from a different title because the title of the whole page is "American Burlesque", so it's sort of redundant. Besides the title issue, I think this section is well developed.

I agree that the "Burlesque shows on film" section could use some restructuring because it's a bit random at the moment-- it kind of seems like there are a million things to be talked about in terms of burlesque on film, so I think a more clear focus would be good. I really like the last section you drafted that starts, "Prior to burlesque films, the typical narratives..." because it highlights burlesque's feminist overtones.

Overall, your edits look pretty good so far! Hannahrosebuc (talk) 03:26, 20 April 2018 (UTC)

I agree that the page needs a history section and I now have one drafted!

I also agree that the "Burlesque in America" section needs a new title and I was thinking of changing it to "Burlesque Performances"

Hansonc1 (talk) 18:37, 20 April 2018 (UTC)