User talk:Haochendai/sandbox

Peer Review By Melody Pogula
Lead: The lead has good info, but I would add a little more to it. Your Wiki articles seem very detailed with a good amount of info. I think the lead should reflect that by adding a little more. Also, when you get a chance, read through your article for grammar and spelling.

Early Life: The info is really good and planned out well. Again just check for grammar, spelling, and pronoun agreement.

The Legendary Path: She seemed like a very smart woman who accomplished a lot. You found a lot of very important info, and when you get a chance I'd try to smooth out some of the transitions. PS your article is very good but it has a lot of spelling and grammar that can lose you points. I recommend just copying the article and pasting it into a google doc. The google doc will point out any of the small spelling and grammar issues while giving you suggestions on how to fix them. PPS be careful not to make any "emotional" or biased statements. Make sure to keep it only factual with no opinions.

Personal Life and on: The rest of your article is good (I'm assuming you're not finished). If you are done, I would add a little more here and there at the end and go smooth out the other sections. The layout and organization is very balanced, and you have a lot of good info. Be careful with grammar and spelling, and fix up the transitioning. :)

Sources: Whenever you get several pieces of info from one source, you only have to create one citation. When you want to reuse that citation, instead of creating it again, click cite -> re-use -> click on the previous citation.

Melody Pogula (talk) 17:57, 11 July 2019 (UTC)Melody Pogula