User talk:Hardyhouse/Derby Gilbert & Sullivan Company

Feedback
Here is some feedback on this, as requested. First, let me say that your enthusiasm is admirable, and the below comments are intended only for your benefit. I have been editing Wikipedia for over four years, but I have no official position here. I do edit and watch all of the 430 Gilbert and Sullivan-related articles here. High-quality G&S articles on Wikipedia include H.M.S. Pinafore, Trial by Jury, W. S. Gilbert, and D'Oyly Carte Opera Company, among others. The last of these will give you an idea of how an article about an opera company may be written.

It is difficult to write your first article from scratch. I suggest that it would be better to gain a few weeks' experience editing on the site before attempting your first new article. Still, if you are determined to do it right away, the article you are working on has several serious problems. Here are some guidelines that can help you fix this:


 * Please be very careful to use only WP:Reliable sources. Google search screens are certainly not "reliable sources" and cannot be cited.  Any statements in your article that are not properly sourced will be deleted.  See WP:OR and See also WP:V.  Here is the guideline for citation format: WP:CITE, but I would be happy to help you with this.
 * You use many prohibited WP:PEACOCK words, so please see that guideline and try to write in more WP:Neutral, encyclopedic style. Note that Wikipedia is not promotional.  Any statements that are similar to advertising or promotional statements must be deleted.  See WP:PROMOTION.
 * It appears that you have long been involved with the Derby G&S company, including holding the copyright to its website, so please see WP:COI.
 * See, generally, Writing better articles.

Again, I would suggest reading these links, and the ones on your talk page, pondering them for a few weeks while working on other articles, and then coming back to this. All the best! -- Ssilvers (talk) 14:17, 21 July 2010 (UTC)


 * For the citations regarding the "early years" sections, if the information is on your website, you can cite to the appropriate website page, although, of course, newspaper reviews would be better. -- Ssilvers (talk) 15:31, 22 July 2010 (UTC)

Thanks Ssilvers, It was my first attempt and a rushed one at that hence the feedback request. I will spend some time with your kind recommendations and drop you a note when I have done so. Hope you and yours are well. -- Simon —Preceding undated comment added 15:42, 22 July 2010 (UTC).