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Roxy Paine Peer Review - Loan Tran
Article evaluation needs more information in order to evaluate. Some suggestions on what could be expanded on, the introduction could include more of an overall idea of who Roxy Paine was and his background. This will help lead the readers into the article and have a better sense of what the article will talk about. The group mentions on revising the Awards section but could go into detail about what specifically they want to improve on in this section. Article evaluation should include a list of possible resources, as well.

Article Evaluation: Jesse Parham
Well... there's not really much to say about this. I'm still not sure if this is actually the page where the whole group is putting information down or if there's another page somewhere that we don't know about. Either way, I would like to see much more information on the artist, what do you think the article needs? More biography-type information on the person? Maybe instead you think there should be more information on what work the artist has done? There's just not enough written down for me to understand what big changes need to be made.

I don't know if this group has already found this article while searching for information, but here's an interview with Roxy Paine herself, it might make for an interesting read: http://web.b.ebscohost.com.cyrano.ucmo.edu:2048/ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?vid=1&sid=a3e4216b-483d-4c88-a525-ebde59b725a9%40sessionmgr101 — Preceding unsigned comment added by JAP09940 (talk • contribs) 13:50, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Article Evaluation: Carter Mackender
Maybe I'm looking at the wrong sandbox, but I don't see many changes being made at this point. There are several areas that could be expanded on in this article. As well as the fact that Roxy Paine is a living artist so many citations are needed. --- — Preceding unsigned comment added by 153.91.202.128 (talk) 16:09, 16 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review: Xavier Banks
If the sandbox is where the work should be located then there is not much to review. Depending on the overall article it should be noted whether it is an article about the artist and his life, specifically the artists work, or both. If it is about both then I think the introduction could be a bit longer and save the museum information for later on in the article maybe under its own subtitle. The introduction should introduce me to this artist. What if the reader has no clue who Roxy Paine is? Then it is hard to understand why an he does what he does with no information to reference the past.

Also, although there are pictures throughout the article, because there is a "gallery" subtitle there should definitely be more pictures added. Just to allow the reader to have more insight on the artists work.

Overall, the article is goos and there is a lot of material I think with a few tweaks the article can become great.

Xvb1998 (talk) 2:13, 16 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review-Victoria Armstrong
If this is the sandbox where the work should be found then there is nothing for me to peer review. There should be areas where we can see orginization of topics in the article or any editing work done to the article. It would be helpful to also have some sort of information about what each student is in charge of working on. Something you could do is to copy/paste the whole article into the sandbox in which you are working and edit/expand from there. There are many areas to expand on in the Roxy Pain article such as the introductory section, works, and award sections. There could also be work done citing or deleting the statements without proper citation. — Preceding unsigned comment added by VictoriaA91 (talk • contribs) 20:34, 17 March 2019 (UTC)