User talk:Hauschbc/sandbox

There are two main issues with the article in your sandbox:

1. I believe that the text done in bold should not be in bold. You seem to be stressing certain words that probably don't need to be stressed, especially in this type of article.

2. The "conversational" style (and tutorial format) you used seems to be more suited to a textbook or tutorial website. This can be seen in the phrases you use such as "Now let's...", "Notice that...", and "You can see...". The article should be reformatted so that it would be more like an encyclopedia entry. Perhaps you could look at the way the original part of the article was worded.

Cag001 (talk) 22:13, 5 May 2014 (UTC)