User talk:Havenxshowit/sandbox

Peer Review
Haven, I am very impressed with how much you have added! I think you've done a really good job at explaining all of the chapters and explaining why the ideas they are about are significant to the broader topic of Asian American feminism. Also I like that you added in the history because for people looking at this page, they might not know why it is contextually significant. Throughout your edit, there are quite a few misspellings which can be fixed just by proofreading it again. I don't think you really need the "early beginning" section and that sentence could be added onto the previous section, but definitely keep it if you were planning on adding to it. The most important thing that should be done is adding your citations into the writing. I see you have really good sources and have drawn a lot from them, but they should be in there particularly after quotes and somewhat controversial or biased statements. This will help your neutrality because you are saying where it came from. Clearly Asian American feminism is important and the women have not been listened to, but where are you getting the information? Also the background of Asian American feminism is really nice to have, but make sure it still is related to the book like you stated for your goals, this is where you could write about the impact of the book. If the sections you have there are informed by the book, that's where the citations can come in to tie it together. Also in your section of the 70s and 80s, the president who made Regeanomics is Ronald Reagan, not (Richard) Nixon. Overall, I can tell you put a lot of work into this and I am inspired to write a lot more on my article! I like your way of writing why your book is important and the context surrounding it, and I will try to find more sources for my article to give more context around my person and why what she is doing is important. Great job! -Carly Royer Royer PLU (talk) 23:45, 18 November 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the feedback Carly! I know there are a lot of details I have to sort out and some things to add still--just been a lot of work, hah. Thanks for pointing out my typos! I tend to think faster than I can type, so I make a mistakes here and there. I'll definitely look into adding more citations to quotes and claims so sources are credited and support statements. In addition, I'll consider about merging or getting rid of the early beginnings section, as well as tie the history back to the reason of the book. Its critical because the centerpiece is the book. Hah, thanks for reminding about Richard Nixon! I knew it wasn't Ronald Regan, but I was too lazy to change it at the time. Nonetheless, thanks for looking through! Much appreciated. Good luck with your article! - Haven Havenxshowit (talk) 01:20, 23 November 2018 (UTC)