User talk:Hayleyalvarez

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Hello, Hayleyalvarez, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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The Lead Section: This article doesn't have a great lead section. It jumps into responsibilities and then it also doesn't smoothly transition to other topics on the subject. The lead does give an understanding of what the article will be talking about. The Content: This article has potential on the provided content. The article needs a list of all of its sources as well. Tone and Balance: The article needs smoother transitioning, instead of jumping from conclusion to conclusion. This article did a great job of strictly sticking to facts and staying away from opinions! Sources and References: The article needs all of the sources that were used. There's only one on the article and I know that all this information didn't come from that website. Organization: The article has great facts/information, just not so good transitioning. It is not smooth whatsoever, jumping from one thought to another. Also, the way all the information is in one paragraph doesn't look good and is hard to read. Overall Impressions: Honestly, I believe the information has great potential. It just needs to be organized better with smoother transitioning to make reading not so difficult. The article does a really good job staying away from bias information and opinions.