User talk:HelpMeKnow08/Strasbourg-sandbox

12/4/2018 Evaluation by Emanel2

 * Points: 34/40
 * Grade: 85%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard 1. "Local schools teach French, however, it is not.." - in this sentence, I would put a semicolon before 'however': "Local schools teach French; however, it is not.." 2. In the first paragraph after the third sentences, there are too much spaces (between sentence 3 and 4). 3. Where you list the types of wines, I would put a semicolon at the end of each of the first three types, and a period at the end of the fourth type. 4. In the 'Origins and notable records' section, maybe put a period at the end of each sentence? 5. Put a semicolon instead of a colon at the end of each award.

Language
Meets standard. - Seems neutral to me.

Organization
Nearly meets Standard. - Good paragraphs and headers; however, when you are listing the awards, it becomes hard to follow what is what. Also, there is no separate section for the references.

Coding
Nearly meets standard. - There are some code errors, please look through it. Add reference section. Also, maybe link some words in the text to other Wikipedia pages?

Validity
Meets standard. - The awards section is hard to understand.

Completion
Meets standard. - Maybe add some more information on wines?

Relevance
Meets standard. - I learned some information about the culture of Strasbourg while reading.

12/4/2018 Evaluation by Benjamin Pocheron

 * Points: 31/40
 * Grade: 77.5%

Spelling/Grammar
'''Nearly meets standard. (3)'''

1. "Strasbourg's historic centre. They feature hundreds" There are two spaces after the period.

2. "The Octopix", second last sentence.

Language
'''Meets standard. (4)'''

1.But you could do better in being more neutral.

Organization
'''Nearly meets Standard. (3)'''

1. One of your paragraphs is "Bicultural". To me it doesn't make sense to have an adjective as a header. "Biculture" would be better.

2. For the bullet points, please use Wikipedia's bullet points. I feel like you copied and pasted from another documents and the bullet points and list do not look good.

3. One extra blank line between "Origins and Notable Records" paragraph and "Film Festival" paragraph.

4. In your list, be consistent with whether you use periods at the end of your phrases, or not. I like to use semicolons for my list, until the last bullet point where I use a period.

5. Good use of headings and paragraphs though.

6. Add a reference heading

Coding
'''Nearly meets standard. (3)'''

Validity
'''Meets standard. (3)'''

1. "Strasbourg is consistently chosen as one of the top global destinations" Citation?

2. "Strasbourg is in the eastern region of France that several times has been claimed by Germany". Maybe call out the new French region?

Completion
'''Nearly meets standard. (3)'''

1. " Many structures have a distinctive look of a German village with half-timbered construction." Do you have more examples?

2. "Strasbourg Cathedral was the world’s tallest building for 227 years" Do you have the dates?

3. To me, it needs to a little deeper.

Relevance
'''Meets standard. (4)'''

1. But add more information

Spelling/Grammar
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Nearly meets standard 1. I’m bad at this also and not the one to get advice from, however the structure and spelling and punitions of this seems off to me and possibly Id research it to make sure it’s in its proper form. I use a program to proof my edits and also a friends usually helps me catch things missed.

Language
Meets standard. - Seems neutral to me.

Organization
Nearly meets Standard. - Good paragraphs and headers; however, when you are listing the awards, it becomes hard to follow what is what. Also, there is no separate section for the references.

Coding
Nearly meets standard. - There are some code errors, please look through it. Add reference section. Also, maybe link some words in the text to other Wikipedia pages?

Validity
Meets standard. – good but confusing to me?

Completion
Meets standard. – Explain the wine in simple standard maybe? For someone who’s never had it?

Relevance
Meets standard. – Informative.