User talk:Hlux1999/sandbox

Your research seems very good and you have a lot of content on your sandbox. I think that the information that you are adding will really help develop the page's section on vaginal injuries. I'm not sure if you had added the section about penile or testicular trauma, but both of these sections can be greatly improved. I would recommend researching these two injuries. If you research and add the same quality of content as your research on vaginal injuries, this page will be very robust and well written. The only other gap that I can see in the page is that the header or introductory section of the page (the area directly beneath the title) could be expanded. This is a good and concise definition of genital trauma, but some elaboration could help. This section of the page is meant to be almost like a brief summary of what the topic is. Many people will be visiting this page but not for long, and the introductory sentence and/or paragraph may be the only thing that they read. If the only information that the reader gets out of the page is a definition, then the page is not very successful. Simply adding a sentence or two about "some potential genital injuries include..." could really make this page look and sound better. Other than these two areas, your research is very good and your content will definitely improve the page. Gstock1 (talk) 17:02, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Final wiki contribution comments: Overall great content added! There were a few minor grammatical issues throughout that I edited directly in your page. There were also some minor issues with clarity that I fixed directly in the page, except one sentence that would be awesome if you could (quickly) clarify if you have time: "Some of the reasons this may occur are self-mutilation with psychiatric disturbances, sexual need, accidents, iatrogenic injuries, or revenge and marriage breakdown." Great job though! Nlegate (talk) 18:21, 10 December 2019 (UTC)