User talk:Hmc442/First Draft of Article

Peer Review of Article Vacuum activity By User Emw3181
Peer Review provided here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Peepums_nastygum/Vacuum_activity/Emw3181_Peer_Review Emw3181 (talk) 01:43, 31 October 2019 (UTC)Emw3181

Vacuum Activity Peer Review
Hello! More information could be included into the introduction paragraph, but nice edits on the overall content. It appears much more organized than before. More insight on major sections could be incorporated into the introduction to provide background on the topic. Link to peer review here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Peepums_nastygum/Vacuum_activity/Ethologyisfun31_Peer_Review Ethologyisfun31 (talk) 23:04, 4 November 2019 (UTC)