User talk:Hoellitd195

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SO100: Instructor Comments
Tyler - this is a really good draft. It needs copy editing -- there are some wording/grammar issues that you will need to address by going over it and checking that things make sense. Finally, your citations are fine, but you need to go in and edit them so they have a title, author, and more info on where they come from. Be sure you have at least 5 sources in your final draft!
 * for example 'becoming a normality' should just say "becoming normal"
 * you say "more of an impressive job title" but impressive is a subjective or biased word. What do you mean by that? How is that measured? Be careful and exact with your wording.
 * you say "is a violation of cooperative principle maxims that exploits gains for an organization" - what does this mean? I'm not sure what you mean here. Reword this.
 * It might be a good idea to talk to someone at the writing center at ECC to help with the wording.

Let me know if you have any questions for me. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sarahczarita (talk • contribs) 02:03, 11 April 2017 (UTC)