User talk:Hollywoo Star Peanutbutter/sandbox

Minor revisions necessary. Your article seems nearly complete but has some missing sections. Sentences begin with a word or a date and then you have put in placeholders. You should complete this draft in full so that your classmates who are peer reviewing will have a better understanding of what your fully completed article will look like. What you have is well written, your sources are well used and you are in keeping with what Wikipedia expects in terms of written style. Overall, good work! Finish up this draft and carefully reread and edit it before getting ready to post.

Batcow39 (talk) 16:45, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Overall, good contributions to a poor quality stub. All you citation links are working - good, trackable sources. It is difficult to fully asses without reading it mixed in with the original article, however I would say try to use "she" only after you have restated Twomey's name in the section. I think in general it is worth it to do another go-over and fix up some of the awkward sentence structure and word choice, but the content is great. Good Stuff! MrahGR (talk) 19:00, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review: Everything you've written in the article seems relevant and neutral. Your citations are organized and well linked to their sources. You've blended your research with the previous information very well, and you could further improve your article by restructuring and combining the new/old portions together. Overall your article is really well-written! Try to introduce your director with her full name/last name at the beginning of each paragraph, rather than "she". Using subtitles for each of her films would help organize the "Career" section of your article. Great job, really interesting information! Thisismyanonymoususername (talk) 03:28, 27 February 2018 (UTC)