User talk:Hondaporsh24/sandbox

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Nice work on your article draft, but it doesn't seem to be quite finished.


 * You don't have a lead section. Wikipedia articles should being with a lead section that summarizes all the main points of the article. See pages 7-9 in the Editing Wikipedia brochure.
 * You have a bullet point "Introduction of the disease". Do you plan to add this?
 * You can't start a section by simply saying "It was first described..."; you would begin with something like "Bing–Neel syndrome was first described by..." Overall, your tone isn't what you'd normally find in an encyclopedia article.
 * You can't use long quotes like this: "intrathecal chemotherapy with several cycles of systemic chemotherapy followed by autologous stem cell-supported high-dose therapy transplant. The patient discontinued all treatment in 2009 and was still asymptomatic by the time a follow-up report was published in 2013.” Quotes should be kept to a minimum, and only used if the precise wording use in the source substantially improves the reader's understanding. You probably shouldn't be using that source anyway - your sources need to be consistent with WP:MEDRS. You should be using recent review articles, not articles that report the results on experiments or case studies.
 * That same section includes the following

For starters, this is completely unsourced - that's a very big problem when you're talking about treatment options. In addition, you shouldn't be discussing treatment options like this at all unless you're a licensed medical practitioner. You can describe treatments that are used, but you absolutely have to source the descriptions to high-quality sources. And just report what the sources say, both good and bad. Don't give advice. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 01:13, 1 April 2017 (UTC)