User talk:Honestbean/sandbox

Hey Honestbean! This is Henley, I took a look at your article. Martha sounds like a really awesome woman, and you did a good job of stating the basics of her professional accomplishments. Have you considered mentioning when she was alive? It might be helpful for the lead section so there's transition to the early life section of the article. Otherwise, there’s a couple typos, but altogether I’m excited to read more of the article. You might consider mentioning her education background as well, perhaps where she studied when she published her works, and to what level she was educated (Masters, PhD, etc). Keep up the good work! I made a couple of quick edits, by no means do you have to keep them, but bolded words I would suggest removing or changing

Martha Doan (June 6, 1872 - April 18,1960) was an American chemist and who's -whose- work includes research in compounds of thallium, three published works - articles? -, and work as a professor at various institutions in the US. Her work in education includes teaching at one high school and three colleges. She was a - the? - Dean of Women for two Colleges, Earnhelm College and Iowa Wesleyan College. In addition to her involvement in higher education, she was involved with several national organizations that involved chemistry and science. She was awarded a certificates for Outstanding Service to Science in 1951. There is now a garden dedicated to her in her hometown of Westfield, Indiana, in honor of her interests - in - science, nature, and horticulture.

Peer Review
Hey Honestbean, I like the progress that you have made with your draft for the Martha Doan article, but I have picked up on some mistakes in grammar. Looking at the first section about Martha To improve this section, I added a link to horticulture for those who do not know what that is. I would also suggest adding a lead sentence to the article to summarize the article itself. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sumchemist (talk • contribs) 02:34, 11 February 2018 (UTC)

Looking at early life: I believe you have a typo. Westfeild, IN --> Westfield, IN

I also believe you have an unnecessary comma present in a sentence. "Abel Doan was the president of the local bank, and the family resided on a farm, and were well known among the community." I would consider removing the comma between "farm and were well known."

Looking at education and career:

"Afterwords, she received an M.S. from Purdue." Afterwords --> Afterwards

"Her work towards this advanced chemistry degree revolved around research of thallium and related compounds." insert the word the before research, so it reads as "the research." Otherwise, the noun phrase is missing a determiner before it and it does not flow as well.

In addition to the grammar errors, I have a question surrounding this article. Is there a previously existing Wikipedia page for Martha Doan? If there is, I have been unsuccessful in locating it.

Sumchemist (talk) 02:29, 11 February 2018 (UTC)

Thanks Sumchemist, I will make those edits before publishing the article. There is not currently an existing page for Martha Doan, but it has been suggested that one be made for her. So, this will be a completely new page! Thanks for asking Honestbean (talk) 03:02, 16 February 2018 (UTC)