User talk:Hordaland/Archives/2015/May

Murphyant's query
Hello, Hordaland! I am a new wikipedia user, username:Murphyant, doing a small English project for an undergraduate course where we make a small contribution to wikipedia. I am working on a small section that I plan to add to the Circadian Rhythms page under the section: Human Health. I noticed that you are a major contributor to this article, and I was hoping you could take a look at my sandbox where I am currently working on this and give me any feedback that would help me fit my writing to the style of wikipedia - or just flat out tell me anything I am doing wrong. Here's my sandbox: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Murphyant/sandbox Thanks!! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Murphyant (talk • contribs) 19:02, 9 April 2015 (UTC)


 * Hi Murphyant, sorry I'm late getting back to you. I see you didn't sign your comment above.  It's easy to do.  Just click on the pencil icon at the top of the edit box or type four tildes (~) in a row.  Sign your comments on Talk pages, not within articles, of course.
 * I've just questioned user:Jaaron95 on his talk page, asking why he reverted your edit to the article Circadian rhythm; it looks good to me, though I can only access the abstract. (If you have the full text, I'd love to have it!  You can e-mail me. See left margin here: Tools, "Email this user".)
 * Looking at your sandbox:
 * The word nocturia needs to be wikilinked.
 * Remove space(s) preceding reference(s). (I fixed one.)
 * Multiple sclerosis should always have small (lower case) s in sclerosis and lower case m when it is within a sentence.
 * Regarding "associated with abnormal circadian rhythms in body temperature", I'd replace " in" with "of" or possibly "of the".
 * Couldn't the content of sub-section "Disruption" rather be integrated into the section(s) above?
 * "Administering Ghrelin to patients daily" --> lower case ghrelin.
 * These pages are relevant WP:MEDMOS and WP:MEDRS; you may have looked at them already. There are medical editors who do NOT like primary sources and they (try to) insist on secondary sources such as reviews.  Your source(s) may be questioned or deleted by some editors.
 * Comparing to the article Circadian rhythm, I think your planned addition is a very good idea. You have wikilinked only terms that were not wikilinked before.  The above suggestions may improve your efforts somewhat, but I think you've done a great job here!  I hope you continue to contribute to Wikipedia in future!--Hordaland (talk) 16:26, 12 April 2015 (UTC)
 * In addition, you might want to look at the way I've fixed your Zelinski reference in the article. You had written/pasted the same ref three times, so it got shown as 3 different references in the list at the bottom.  I've fixed it so that there is just one Zelinski ref in the list, pointing back to 3 places in the article; 46a,b,c.  --Hordaland (talk) 18:39, 12 April 2015 (UTC)

Captain Sabertooth
I was looking at the Norway page and trying to figure out what most needed to come over. I think that the one that looks like it would need to come over the most is the section about the performance history. The other sections look like they would be important but some of them are unsourced, so they'd likely be considered original research on here. (It's probably stuff that everyone knows, but isn't known in the English speaking world.) I could probably manage some of the other sections with Google translate, like the film section and to a degree some of the information at no:Kaptein_Sabeltann. I'm not sure what to do with the page no:Kaptein_Sabeltanns_verden, since offhand I wasn't able to find a whole lot of coverage for this specific attraction- I think that I may just merge it into the article for Kristiansand Zoo and Amusement Park and make a mention of this at the main Sabertooth page. The Google translation for this page was fairly clear for the most part (only so many ways to describe amusement park attractions, I guess) so I could probably do this myself. If you could just check over the finished product for any glaring errors, that'd be wonderful. Tokyogirl79 (｡◕‿◕｡)  05:20, 13 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Articles in the Norwegian Wikipedias are typically unsourced (only a slight exaggeration). I'm working on a document due 15 May and will look at Sabeltann after I finish that.  Or after 15 May, whichever comes first :(
 * Of course I will proofread the final product & likely before it's final, too.
 * --Hordaland (talk) 06:31, 13 May 2015 (UTC)

Please help me - I don't dare change the names of articles.
The powers-that-be have changed the names of some disorders. The guilty, who made the changes, are DSM-5 and (secondarily) the American Academy of Sleep Medicine (AASM). I s'pose we should change them here, too.


 * Circadian rhythm sleep disorder- - - becomes Circadian rhythm sleep-wake disorder
 * Delayed sleep phase disorder - - - - becomes Delayed sleep-wake phase disorder
 * Advanced sleep phase disorder- - - becomes Advanced sleep-wake phase disorder
 * Non-24-hour sleep-wake disorder- - becomes Non-24-hour sleep-wake rhythm disorder
 * Irregular sleep-wake rhythm- - - - - - becomes Irregular sleep-wake rhythm disorder

I'll go in and fix the new abbreviations (CRSWD etc.) and the use of the titles within the articles.

Thank you very much. --Hordaland (talk) 18:25, 3 May 2015 (UTC)
 * My advice is to post the suggestion on the relevant talk pages, with the reliable sources, give it a week, and if no one objects, I will happily do the moves for you. Happy Squirrel(Please let me know how to improve!) 18:36, 3 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks. You are correct:  I need to find out for sure (I'm pretty sure) that the DSM made the decision to change the names.  And I need to find a usable source.  On my ToDo list.  --Hordaland (talk) 08:29, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Technically, those should have en dashes instead of hyphens. (Page goes at the en dash version, redirect in the hyphen version.)
 * Circadian rhythm sleep disorder- - - becomes Circadian rhythm sleep–wake disorder
 * Delayed sleep phase disorder - - - - becomes Delayed sleep–wake phase disorder
 * Advanced sleep phase disorder- - - becomes Advanced sleep–wake phase disorder
 * Non-24-hour sleep-wake disorder- - becomes Non-24-hour sleep–wake rhythm disorder
 * Irregular sleep-wake rhythm- - - - - - becomes Irregular sleep–wake rhythm disorder
 * You could create them now as redirects (to be kept as redirects unless and until you verify that the names have officially changed). Moving over a single-edit redirect is easy.  WhatamIdoing (talk) 15:44, 18 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you, WAID! Done (& likely done too much, but that shouldn't matter).  --Hordaland (talk) 09:08, 19 May 2015 (UTC)