User talk:Horizontechs

Your submission at Articles for creation: Draft:Hazardous Gas Cabinet (July 1)
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In reply to your message at FireflySixtySeven's talk page: Wikipedia content must be verifiable from reliable, independent, published sources. "Sources not to be published" are useless for Wikipedia's purposes. Papers in technical and engineering journals, textbooks, reputable magazines or maybe newspaper articles would make good sources. Manufacturers' websites are useless, however, since they're biased, written to promote the respective manufacturer's products, and not subject to meaningful editorial oversight or fact-checking. Take for example one of the websites you provided as a reference: "Our GASGUARD® gas cabinets are the industry benchmark for cost-effective fabwide gas supply. Our cost-competitive solutions will help your process run more efficiently and effectively." Somehow I doubt their competitors would agree that GASGUARD is the industry benchmark, and worse, it doesn't really provide useful information about gas cabinets. . The topic of your draft clearly is suitable for Wikipedia, and the content itself seems good enough - but you must provide reliable, published sources to back up that content. As a secondary issue, you may also want to work on the draft's wording; the lead should summarize the article content, and the first sentence should give a good indication for laypersons what it's all about. Compare your current first sentence with something like this:
 * In chemical engineering, a gas cabinet is a safety device for the storage of cylinders of hazardous gases.

I'd say something like this would give a much clearer understanding of what it's all about. Huon (talk) 19:16, 3 August 2014 (UTC)