User talk:Hphilli2/sandbox

Where do you plan on adding this new section to the article? I agree with the suggested rewording on the sandbox, for the most part except I do think that the part that says "(e.g. apraxia)" should be removed as I don't think that fits with the tone of the rest of the article. Reading the published article I feel like there is not a whole lot to expand upon, although there were some instances in which I would use different words to create a consistent tone. I also found it helpful in my editing to look at the talk page of the article to see what other users have identified as being an issue, and to see if those things have been addressed.

somewhere in the article it is stated that symptoms are "vague" which doesn't feel right tone-wise. Maybe something that you can fix! Rdewitt92 (talk) 02:41, 7 October 2019 (UTC)


 * These are all great suggestions. I appreciate your care in looking it over! I plan to place this section under either "treatment" or "prognosis" just to give more information about options for those individuals living with Rett. I looked over the talk page before I began editing, but I'll definitely look again and consider rewording the parts you mentioned. Thanks!Hphilli2 (talk) 00:46, 14 October 2019 (UTC)