User talk:Hrase1/sandbox

Hrase1's Peer Review by Catherine Davis
I liked that all of the apps mentioned are based on school curriculum, however I would explain that in the title. Instead of writing, "Apps Used in Schools" it might be better to say "Apps Used by Students for Schoolwork" or something along those lines. The audience might expect to see Venmo or Cash App included on this list because many students use both of these on a daily basis but not for schoolwork. Also I think it should be mentioned that these are apps used by students in college mainly. If your group is trying to reach a broader range of students I would include the app Kahoot! as it is used by many American classrooms.

I would also like to see this list of apps broken down into sections with a title for each instead of listed at the beginning. I think it would introduce each app clearly and there will be more space to work with. Inside of each of these sections, there should be a paragraph on the development and growth of each of these apps and the sources used should reflect this information.

Finally, the small paragraph at the end does a good job introducing the smart phone. I would link the wiki page on smartphones and their growth in this section. Then as the paragraph introduces each app there should be links to the different sections that your group plans to write. Lastly, I think there should be some images added to make this page more interesting.

I really enjoyed this page's topic. I believe it is extremely relevant to our generation and that this Wiki will further other people's knowledge about the changes that have begun in America's school curriculum.

Peer Review
This is good. I would not add anything specific to just LSU though. This is going on a public website and it takes away from the article in my opinion. The article is neutral for the most part. I would take out the sentences “There are many apps used that help students excel.” “The Quizlet app is very easy and accessible to use.” And “This is app is not a popular and is only currently used in the United States” I would take these out because they either do not make sense or they are biased in some way. All of the viewpoints are represented in this piece. There are references missing though. I would try to find more articles to back up your information. This will help with info coming from reliable sources and having out of date info, which you don’t have.Cflint3 (talk) 01:31, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Summary Week 11
Our group really appreciates the feedback given during the peer review period. We have gone over the suggestions and we will be implementing a few of them. First, we plan to change our article title to "Apps Used by Students for Schoolwork" because this will allow the reader to understand that we aren't just talking about apps used in school, but apps that are beneficial to things like homework, tests, and quizzes. Second, we will continue to work on our language, trying to remain neutral throughout the entire section. Lastly, we will attempt to make subtopics for each of the apps we are discussing in order for it to be more visually appealing. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hrase1 (talk • contribs) 19:31, 4 November 2018 (UTC)