User talk:Huba1080/sandbox

Hey Kinzee, here are some suggestions for your topic. 1) I'd probably say "one of the risks" for the first sentence. 2) Since Wikipedia is more factual, I think they don't like when we say things like "may not consider". Probably better to be more factual about how many people don't consider it or not put it at all to make it sound more "encylopedic" like the timeline for last week suggested. 3) Probably put what dB scale you're talking about (ex. dBA, dBC) 4) For the same reason as #2, probably put " listening with PLD is a popular activity" and leave out the "almost universally". I feel it sounds opinionated. 5) "Aerobic or dance classes also provide excess levels of noise" -> probably say "sound" not "noise". Same in the first sentence of your sandbox. 6) Food for thought-would your subsection be considered "medical"? If so, are your sources review articles or systematic reviews? 7) Maybe very very briefly discuss how OSHA regulates some work places, and link to OSHA for reference for the part where you talk about factories? Lauraware4 (talk) 18:01, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

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Miss Kinzee's Wonderful Writing
Hi Kinzee, I just went over your section and I have a number of suggestions. Overall, the information was provided clearly and was easily understood. Great job!

1. Did any of the articles you used mention temporary threshold shift? Depending on the individual, this is probably happening, especially if the individual is at the gym for a longer period of time.

2. I second Laura's recommendation of integrating OSHA into the second paragraph. Mentioning time weighting averages (those helpful TWAs) would help explain that we all have a certain amount of noise that we can have in a day. If we get too greedy and want more than our share, that's when we start to see auditory damage.

3. The dB measurements in the second paragraph, should those be in dBA? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Carla.White (talk • contribs) 22:16, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

Another thought
Hey Kinzee, agreed that you did a great job with this article. Is there any was you could add a small section on how to protect hearing while being physically active? Arnold6794 (talk) 03:49, 12 November 2017 (UTC)