User talk:Hungrywolvesgrind/North Dakota oil boom

peer review
A. Neutral Voice

- The discussion on the impacts of population increase on infrastructure and services in North Dakota is presented neutrally, outlining the consequences without taking a side.

Improvements for Neutral Voice/Tone:

- The article could improve its neutral voice in the section discussing crime and its effects on the community. Some statements could be seen as attributing crime to specific groups without sufficient evidence, which may come off as biased. Revising these statements to present facts without implying causation could enhance neutrality.

B. Close Paraphrasing & Plagiarism

Potential Issues:

- The description of the effects of the boom on crime rates might be too close to existing sources without proper citation, especially if these observations are common in other analyses of the area.

Strategies for Improvement:

- To avoid close paraphrasing, the author should ensure to synthesize information from sources rather than rearranging sentences. Incorporating multiple sources to provide a comprehensive view can also help. For direct facts or quotations, proper citations are necessary.

C. Readability

Strong Sentences:

- The explanation of the 'problem triangle' is clear and effectively conveys the complex dynamics of boom towns.

- The initial description of infrastructure strains due to industrialization is concise and impactful.

Areas Needing Improvement:

- The transition into discussing crime rates and its demographic implications could be smoother to enhance readability.

- Some sections have complex sentences that may require re-reading for clarity, particularly when discussing the specific impacts on Indigenous women.

D. Rubric Feedback

Lead Section

Introductory Sentence: You already did this part, it is the direct introductory sentence.

Summary: Include a summary that concisely encapsulates the key points discussed in the article to give readers a snapshot of the content.

Context: Your context provided in the lead correlates with and is reflected in the detailed sections of the article.

Article

Organization: You streamline the structure for better flow and logical progression between sections.

Content: Cover all critical areas of the topic thoroughly, ensuring a complete informational offering to the reader.

Balance: You already rrovide a fair representation of all perspectives, avoiding a biased view.

Tone: You already keep the tone consistently formal and neutral, suitable for an encyclopedic entry.

Images: Good job! You got the images.

Reference

Citations: I didn't see the reference to citations, but there are some images.

Existing article

New Sections: You add new sections that are informative and relevant without repeating what's already covered.

Re-organization: Article cover the topic in organized.

E. Final Questions/Considerations

Greatest Strength:

- The project's greatest strength lies in its detailed exploration of the socioeconomic impacts of industrial booms, providing a comprehensive view of the challenges and dynamics at play.

Area for Improvement:

- The most significant improvement would be adding some references to make sure your resources are citations Yilinganna (talk) 17:34, 7 March 2024 (UTC)