User talk:Hunterkiley

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Feedback on article
Resting Satyr -The gallery is lovely. There were just some unclear parts, and I have some suggestions. I would like for you to clarify if you feel there is a need to. -"115 examples of the type are known, of which the best known is in the Capitoline Museums." (taken from the wiki page) >115 examples of this type of statue are known. (And I'm unsure what makes this one the "best known," can this be clarified?)

-In the description, there's a lot of "he/his" pronoun usage, which is generally fine, but I find usually when detailing a work of art, it is commonly described by simply "it". "It shows a young satyr, identifiable from his clearly pointed ears and the pardalide (panther pelt) worn across his torso. He rests his right elbow on a tree trunk, in an unstable position, supported only on his left leg. His right leg is bent, with his right foot just touching his left heel. In a number of examples a restorer has added an attribute held in his right hand, often a flute or Pan pipes, while the left hand is on the left hip holding down the pelt. The facial features are well defined and the nose slightly upturned. His heavy hair, recalling the iconography of river gods, is held by a cord or a crown. (taken from the wiki page) I would change the wording to something along the lines of this: >This particular statue is of a young satyr, identifiable from the clearly pointed ears, and the paradalide (panther belt) worn across the torso. The right elbow of the statue rests on a tree trunk, ...ect. -Additionally in the description: "In a number of examples a restorer has added an attribute held in his right hand, often a flute or Pan pipes, while the left hand is on the left hip holding down the pelt." This isn't cited. What examples are being talked about? -Lastly in the description: "His heavy hair, recalling the iconography of river gods,..." (taken from the wiki page) I didn't know "heavy hair" was iconography of river gods. This doesn't seem like common knowledge, and should be sourced. -The attribution quote isn't cited, but the source appears to be given simply in text. -I would relabel the "examples" header to be "other versions," or "other examples of the Resting Satyr" -As for additions, I would talk about the possible cultural and historical iconography of the tree trunk and the showing of genitalia, but not of the chest. I would also note somewhere in the description that this is (i think) a roman copy, and the artwork would have been most likely a Greek bronze.

Thank-you for giving me the chance to review your article! I hope my suggestions and notes can help you with your article. Good luck! KDavisArt (talk) 03:47, 27 October 2017 (UTC)