User talk:Hyojungsong

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Hello, Hyojungsong, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Introducing myself
Hi, I am Hyo Jung, Song and a senior having advertising management media major in MSU.

Suggestions
To be related to our week 3 assignment topic, I have chosen the article of ‘human body’ because I was interested in the visual culture of human body. Then, I focused on the human body more deeply. Generally, the article is covered by reliable sources and neutral sources with proper citations. Besides, I believe that the paragraphs of article are very well related to the topic of human body and I liked it especially, the paragraphs of the society and culture of human body. It is because it was about the history of human body cultures with the necessary sources were used. Nevertheless, I would like to suggest several things to improve on the article. Firstly, I think it would be better if the composition paragraph in the article move to another topic that relates with the topic of science. Also, some of the citations in this paragraph are unnecessary, for instance it cited a word of 'water' which everyone would know what it means. Lastly, the lengths of each paragraph are not equally divided with important key words. Hyojungsong (talk) 01:43, 26 January 2017 (UTC)