User talk:Hypemike23/sandbox

Your article is easy to understand and your points are all very relevant and would help a reader interested in the topic. This being said, there are a few ways this could be improved. Firstly, rather than discussing the use of sources within your article - (eg. one citation, there is an article) - just directly use the information, and remember to link the citation after. This will make it easier to read. I like that you include the documentary Supersize Me, but you should still cite the exact resources you used for the quotes for each sentence- and this is the same for throughout the entire article, as at the moment you have not linked any articles that you used to get the information from.

(Ellieduley (talk) 14:02, 19 November 2019 (UTC))

Jamisonahrens (talk) 19:30, 19 November 2019 (UTC)This section is easy to follow and is all good and relevant information. For the most part, I think this is a finished product other than with sources. Instead of referencing sources, try to just say what you what to say and then cite the source at the end of the sentence or paragraph. Along with this, I think you should add hyperlinks for any of the companies and for any other words that have important information linked to it, such as maybe a definition of mass media. If you cite all of your sources and add some hyperlinks, I think this is a great finished product.