User talk:I'llallowit/sandbox

Nice analysis, Jon. I thought it was interesting that the discussion on the talk page was contentious. You also bring up some good points about debates over what should/should not be included.Carolyncunningham (talk) 21:07, 2 April 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review by Tory Dilley
I enjoyed reading through your Sandbox information. It helped me get an organized idea of your editing plans. The information was easy to read/understand and had a flow.

Information is well organized and neutral.

Your article adjustments helped keep the sections balanced in size and detail.

Your in-text citation links are well placed, link to the Bibliography, and the original source.

Would recommend reviewing the section headings. Some words are capitalized while others do not. Would flow better and look cleaner if all section heads matched.

Also, the Selected Bibliography section is organized chronologically with the exception of the last bullet point (Visions of Cyberspace). Adjusting this bullet point will help keep with the chronological flow.

Overall, your additions were great! ToryDilley (talk) 03:47, 22 April 2019 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the suggestions!I will definitely add section headings. I didn't realize that I could do that on a talk page, so I'll do that. Now that I am looking at the page, it really doesn't follow well without the headings. And I will catch the bullet point issue too--those have taken a while to figure out for some reason. Thanks again!

I&#39;llallowit (talk) 00:00, 28 April 2019 (UTC)