User talk:IBalart/New sandbox

information is neutral. it may be helpful to organize information in subjections. for example adding a section on the effects of drug pollution on marine wildlife. NatalieMoun (talk) 21:59, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Looking good so far. I would suggest you bold font your section headings for organizational sake. Also, you have good information throughout but I would suggest that you flesh it out a little bit more. For example, comparing the section on history to the antipsychotic section. Your history section is all good info but linking it and so on like you do in the antipsychotic section would be ideal. Keep up the good work.LaHaga462 (talk) 22:03, 30 March 2021 (UTC)

You have a lot of good information here, but it currently feels very disjointed and needs to be better organized and more in depth. It seems that almost all your evidence is pollution of water systems, which is good, but state that explicitly! Then maybe take your evidence and start to categorize it (ex. effects on fish, etc.) Then organize into paragraphs that start to tell a coherent story. It's mostly a matter of better organizing your evidence so that the reader can make sense of the trends you identify. Brendankarch (talk) 15:10, 31 March 2021 (UTC)