User talk:IPres10/newsandbox

I think you have a great start! It's a great idea wanting to add the Samoan mythology, seeing as there are many other island's versions listed on the page. What you have is also much more detailed than the link to Ti'iti'i in the See More section, so good work! I think the source you've found for your information is good, though if you could find the citation from the book itself rather than the website that copied the information from the book, I think it would allow readers to know exactly where the original information came from.

The addition to the fishing story is also valuable, I think it will add details the page currently does not have. If you want take things even further, I think maybe you could look at how you could create a general idea of who maui is through similar stories told by all the islands. For example - he is a fire bringer to multiple islands, so you could make a section on him being a fire-bringer and then under that section explain how each of the stories from different places are different. I think this would add clarity to his stories, and I think it would add clarification on the variations of the stories-- as of right now, I'm not sure where you would be adding the variation to the fishing story. Would it be under Maori? Or Hawaiian? It would be more work, so just focusing on adding the Samoan part and other variations is fine too! Still important stuff to add.

Good work so far, just make sure to remember putting the citations into the text you're adding to the page so no one is mistaken where you received the information. You could even link some of the other pages too, if you want to add some clarity if anyone doesn't know any of the gods or places you're talking about. Keep it up! Vxwei (talk) 08:37, 15 April 2019 (UTC)


 * Vxwei thanks for your review and your helpful feedback. IPres10 I agree with your reviewer, I think you added really great sections to this article that were definitely needed, and that your next steps are to add hyperlinks and in-text citations. As we discussed in class, you'll also want to add some more bibliographic references in addition to Westervelt (ideally something a bit more recent). Luckily, the librarians at Hamilton should be able to help you with some good sources. So far you've done a really good job, and I'm looking forward to seeing how the final product shapes up! Gardneca (talk) 00:37, 22 April 2019 (UTC)