User talk:Icedburg824/sandbox

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Hello Olivia131.191.80.40 (talk) 17:50, 11 February 2022 (UTC)

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Group Member Peer Rewiew
Hi Icedburg824! I think you have great ideas for you edits, I think adding information about taxonomy will definitely benefit the Spiny dogfish shark page. I'm not 100% sure if I found where you're creating all your edits and adding new information but I think this is where it is, if not let me know and I'll review it ASAP.

When looking at other organisms wikipedia pages, I do notice a color coded taxonomy chart but our page is missing one, so I think finding a way to add one would benefit others a lot. It might be difficult to do this but I bet our professor would be able to find something and help you make one. I know we're running out of time and making one might put a lot of pressure on you so if not it's totally ok.

I noticed that you want to make edits to the other classifications as some of the pages are lacking a bit of information, but I think it would be hard to make as much edits as you hope for, so I think sticking to one and adding as much info to that would be best. Even so, if you can find a way to add more detail to all I think that would be great as well.

You have a lot of grammatical edits that I really like, the dogfish page tends to be repetitive with certain words and phrases so removing extra words to create a better flow would improve the page.

I wasn't sure if this was your page or not because there were no added images, unless you have them saved elsewhere then you can totally ignore this message, I am excited to see what you have though, adding something about the brain structure would be interesting as you worked at cleaning it away a few weeks earlier.

Finally, I am glad you're working on the intro, I knew it was lacking in some way, I just wasn't sure what it needed, and I think the edits you want to make/add will definitely improve it, even if the edits are small. Again, if I am looking at the wrong page, let me know and I can look over the correct page before our work is due!

Thanks for your peer reviews Mako021 (talk) 17:20, 9 May 2022 (UTC)