User talk:Igfa1983

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-- 17:56, Tuesday, February 2, 2016 (UTC)

Welcome to The Wikipedia Adventure!

 * Hi Igfa1983! We're so happy you wanted to play to learn, as a friendly and fun way to get into our community and mission.  I think these links might be helpful to you as you get started.
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 * The Teahouse new editor help space
 * Wikipedia Help pages

-- 18:02, Tuesday, February 2, 2016 (UTC)

February 2016
Hello, and thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. This is just a note to let you know that I've moved the draft that you were working on to Draft:Ventilative cooling, from its old location at User:Igfa1983/sandbox. This has been done because the Draft namespace is the preferred location for Articles for Creation submissions. Please feel free to continue to work on it there. If you have any questions about this, you are welcome to ask me on my talk page. Thank you. /wiae  /tlk  17:01, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Ventilative cooling (February 11)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by LaMona was:

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.


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LaMona (talk) 21:02, 11 February 2016 (UTC)

Second Review
Unfortunately, the relationship of this to other articles is still unclear. It seems to me that this is an expansion of the very short section "Ventilation : of the article Passive cooling. If that's the case, it should be made clear. If not, further explanation is needed. Some parts of the article are similarly unclear: It wasn't clear that "Annex 62" refers to a particular project that is part of he e International Energy Agency’s Energy in Buildings and Communities Programme. (In normal use in an energy context, Annex would mean either a particular building or part of a building, or a supplementary schedule to a document, such an an energy use regulatory document)--I had to find http://www.iea-ebc.org/projects/ongoing-projects/ to figure this out.

I didn't check to see how closely the text matches the materials in the documents available connected with the project--it's necessary to avoid not just direct copying but close paraphrasing.

Some of the sections here are written is outline form. WP is an encyclopedia, and shouldn't look like Powerpoint. Sometimes such style is unavoidable, as with along list, I do not see anything here that couldn't be better done in paragraphs.

The see-also's are too extensive Proper linking and explanation within the text should deal with most of them.

I try not to use templates--It took be about an hour to research and write this, & I learned a considerable amount that I find interesting. When you;ve done, iuit might be a good idea to let me know directly on my talk page.  DGG ( talk ) 01:40, 18 February 2016 (UTC)