User talk:Ikaarin/sandbox

Good Job, Isra! You've certainly taken the time to read and think about the LVH article. It's important that you have identified aspects of the article that are deficient and need updating. I think you'll do well with this project! Griffyn1987 (talk) 18:45, 21 February 2019 (UTC)

Hi Isra ! It is evident that you put a lot of work into your draft which is commendable. It is clear that you have spent your time and resources to gather the information you have. The topic of the Late Victorian Holocausts is different since your work is based on a book. I’ve noticed that you have separated the book into sections, so it might be a good idea to label what chapters they are to avoid confusion and make a more organized article. While reading “Victoria’s Ghost”, “India’s Nero”, and “The ‘Temple Wage’ “, it is evident that you have put in a lot of work regarding the summary of the book. However, it is still only a Wikipedia page and not a book review. It would be a good idea to condense your information more to avoid it being too lengthy. With looking at your draft as a whole, it is safe to say that “The ‘Temple Wage’” specifically needs to be cut down a lot. With comparing your draft to the original Wikipedia article, I have noticed that the original touches on topics outside of the plot of The Late Victorian Holocaust, such as reviews and publication history. It would be favourable if your draft includes topics such as these in order to create a more informative perspective. Regarding the reviews, there are only links mentioned in the original, it might be a good idea to add these opinions to obtain the reception of the book itself. Other than those suggestions you have certainly done an excellent job with your draft so far and I hope you take my recommendations into consideration for your further editing! Also I truly apologize for my review being so late, somehow my original one never posted so I had to rewrite this one for you, but it still covers all my same points :) Emmanhudson99 (talk) 15:22, 14 March 2019 (UTC)