User talk:Ila22med/sandbox

Hello! It seems like you are marking your contributions in bold to differentiate from the original content. Good strategy, but remember to re-format later! The information you've added seems very well sourced. The only thing I'd reconsider (and I know you're still working on it) is how you're distributing the information. The lead (first section) seems a little bit dense right now. It could be more introductory, which would let you move some of the heavier/more specific information (such as statistics and specific research) into later sections that currently seem untouched. If you have enough sources on that specific study you mentioned in the lead or deem it important enough, don't be afraid to add a new section for it! Other than that, looks like you're in good shape. Song.of.purple.summer (talk) 03:48, 26 October 2018 (UTC)

You are moving along, but you should be closer to a formatted article--RJBazell (talk) 16:45, 25 October 2018 (UTC)