User talk:Intothewoods29/Archive 1

Louvre
Hi, thanks for reviewing the Louvre article. Anyway, I wanted to mention that I would like to continue to edit the article and improve it, with the goal of FA coming eventually. Because you demonstrated an interest, I would like to formally take the opportunity to invite you to continue to contribute in anyway you see fit. If you have the time, feel free to stop on over. Regards, Lazulilasher (talk) 04:01, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

GA reviews and "grammer"
Hi, Intothewoods29, I saw that you've been recently reviewing articles at WP:GAC. Thanks for helping out! I couldn't help but notice, however, your repeated use of the word "grammer" -- it's actually spelled "grammar". Your status as a new reviewer may be more respected if you use a spellchecker during the process. :) María ( habla con migo ) 12:26, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

GA review Sri Lankan Tamil people
Thank you very much for your review and comments. Taprobanus (talk) 19:08, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

Flag of Tunisia GAC
Thank you for reviewing the article. :) Nishkid64 (Make articles, not wikidrama) 19:37, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

GA review Readers' Advisory
Thanks for the review. I'll work on these issues by Friday, or at least have an update for you. JohnRussell (talk) 20:28, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

Mamucium
Thanks for your thorough review of the article, I think I've addressed your concerns. Thanks also for the tips if I want to go for FA, but I think the article may be too short for FA. Nev1 (talk) 22:18, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

Nathaniel Hawthorne
Into, thanks so much for the hard work you put into your thoughtful review of Nathaniel Hawthorne as a GA candidate. I believe I've addressed your specific concerns as best I can, though there was one I disagreed with (though I'd be willing to discuss further)... let me know if there is anything further I can do to improve it at this stage. For your benefit (and mine) I've responded directly to many of your comments at Talk:Nathaniel Hawthorne/GA1. Thanks again! --Midnightdreary (talk) 22:19, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

Re: Review
Sure, go ahead. But, the reason I haven't reviewed the article, is because the Peer Review is still going on and the nominator asked that I wait off until the PR is closed. But, if you still want to review the article, be my guest. However, I must tell you, just in case, that if you had anything to do with the article, such as helping out improve and stuff that that would be considered conflict of opinion. Just letting you know. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 14:45, 31 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Aha. ;) --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 15:30, 31 July 2008 (UTC)

Pinging on Guitar Hero III Mobile GA review fixes
Just letting you know that I've fixed the lead issues at Guitar Hero III Mobile. --M ASEM 16:06, 31 July 2008 (UTC)

Siege of Boston
Alright, I fixed a lot of it, but not all of it, yet. I just want to clairify a few things.


 * Saying "The milita came out" it a common phrase used to describe coming out to fight.
 * The capture of supplies for Dorchester Heights is relevent as it drove the British out of Boston.
 * It is relevent to say he departed to NYC because it shows the reader the next stage of the war.

Anyways, I'll have to fix up the stalmate section and attempt to organize it better. Thanks for reviewing this, it's been a while and no one has done it yet.Red4tribe (talk) 02:17, 3 August 2008 (UTC)

2007 USC Trojans football team
Just took a look at your notes for the GA review of 2007 USC Trojans football team; I've made the corrections you've requested. I have no idea how those Oregon photos ended up tag-less; I usually just copy/paste the tags as I upload my photos onto commons, somehow I missed those. Let me know if the article's up to snuff. --Bobak (talk) 22:36, 4 August 2008 (UTC)

FYI
Just so you know, I moved Userpage:Intothewoods29 (gallery) to User:Intothewoods29/gallery. I assume that is what you were trying to do. Take a look at Subpages for more info on how to create subpages in your userspace. If you have any questions, feel free to ask. Cheers! J.delanoy gabs adds 03:11, 5 August 2008 (UTC)

Invite

 * --Eustress (talk) 12:30, 5 August 2008 (UTC)

Your GA reviews
Please be more careful in the articles that you pass as GA. Jena Six, which you recently passed, has an inadequate lead. Per WP:LEAD, the article's lead should be four full paragraphs summarizing all the main points of the article. It is very important to make sure the lead is adequate in every passed article. I've made a note of it at Talk:Jena Six/GA1. Also, Ways and Means (The West Wing), which you also recently passed had inaccurate dash usage. Per WP:DASH, &mdash; should be used between words in article prose. I fixed it in the article, though. It is a little thing, but a GA should comply as best as possible to the MoS. I just wanted to point these things out to you, to help with reviews and to improve your own article writing. Also, it helps to make a suggestion or two for an article before just passing it. Thanks. Nikki 311  20:56, 5 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I struck out of my comment above, because I clicked on a few more of your reviews, and I did see some suggestions. I was just worried because the two I happened to click on first seemed like blind passes...but no worries there. One more thing...it really helps out if you change the class from B-class/Start-class to GA-class for the different WikiProjects that have tagged an article's talk page (if it passes, of course). They appreciate it. :) Nikki  311  21:04, 5 August 2008 (UTC)

A lot of the GA regulars like to update both, but it isn't necessary. The bot does both once a day. Feel free to drop me a line if you ever have any more questions. Nikki 311  02:16, 6 August 2008 (UTC)

Sozin's Comet
I have answered two of your questions (here to the best of my ability. The one on dashes escapes me though... Rau's Speak Page 22:45, 6 August 2008 (UTC)

GA review World Science Festival
Just a brief note to say that I have (hopefully) addressed the comments you made as part of your GA review World Science Festival. Thanks for taking the time to do the review! Markus Poessel (talk) 00:39, 7 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Many thanks for the helpful GA review of World Science Festival. I do plan on improving the article further (and eventually making it a FA candidate). Markus Poessel (talk) 17:27, 9 August 2008 (UTC)

Vanaja GA and Civility Award
Hello Intothewoods29, firstly allow me to thank you for being so patient and considerate all throughout the GA process. I've no doubts that this was easily the best-handled GA review of all my 9 successful GA nominations! Though it took more than a month for the article to be reviewed (me getting a bit impatient and irksome in the meanwhile), I was thoroughly satisfied to see it handled well at the GA process. Furthermore, the civility award came as a sweet surprise. Thanks so much! You made me day twice! :) In appreciation, I can't say much in words and hence the following:

Chocolatier (video game)
I just did some copy editing really. I'm picky that way. Ten Pound Hammer and his otters • (Broken clamshells • Otter chirps • HELP) 20:31, 7 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Picky is good, thanks! ItW, I've left some questions on Talk:Chocolatier (video game)/GA1 about how you'd like me to proceed, thanks for reviewing the article. Someoneanother 22:39, 7 August 2008 (UTC)

Odwalla
If you look at the comments section of the WP Food banner, you will see a list of suggestions and issues I found in the article. Click through the edit link to address the list. --Jeremy ( Blah blah... ) 16:34, 8 August 2008 (UTC)


 * I put it up for peer review. I have some ideas what needs to be done, but want fresh eyes to look at it. --Jeremy ( Blah blah... ) 19:24, 13 August 2008 (UTC)

GA Review
Hi, I am Ario as you know, and I have done everything you told me to do below, and as a administrater I suspect you are, please if you could tell others to help me out, IF there are still any more problems. And some of the sentences are directly from the books that I referenced, so leave the editing to me, because I don't want someone else to accidently delete words that are from the original source, because its hard to tell what I wrote in the context of what I was referencing to make it shorter, from what the actual authors wrote, so thank you. Also if you could just read the new thngs you see below, and the dashes means that I checked of a requirment you told me to do, so bye.--Ariobarza (talk) 02:49, 9 August 2008 (UTC)Ariobarza talk

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Hi. I'm going to be reviewing this GA Nominee. By the way, you should add the GA banner on the talk page for future nominees. Intothewoods29 (talk) 15:17, 6 August 2008 (UTC)

I'm failing this GA nom, sorry. There are so many astounding grammatical errors, not to mention the murky timeline of events and the miscommunication. below are just some of the stuff that needs to be fixed.


 * Lead / Picture
 * The lead should be at least three paragraphs! That's almost enough for a fail right there./
 * Actually, lead length varies per WP:LEAD; I advocate expansion in order to fully summarize the entire article, but there is no set number of paragraphs a lead must be. For such a brief article, the lead may not be more than two.  María ( habla  con migo ) 16:38, 6 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Check with an expert Wikipedian about your fair use excuse. Try and find a painting of the area that was made 70+ years ago, so it's public domain./
 * First of all, thank you for assessing this article, second the image is a picture of norther iran, near the battle site, found on geocites website, with no file history, and no one claiming its theirs, so that is why ask a user to make it public domain, because I have trouble uploading images. Thirdly, when I put marks in the end of sentences, it means I am checking of that requirment.--Ariobarza (talk) 04:36, 7 August 2008 (UTC)Ariobarza


 * Background
 * First sentence of Background is incomplete! Fix it!/
 * Second sentence of Background is really unclear: "The possible date of the first battle can be deduced to have taken place a little after the summer of 553 BC, when the revolt already began, so the battle is thought to have happened in the beginning of 552 BC". Here you mention two battles that happen a year apart, and it sounds like they're the same battle!/
 * Who is Astyages in the third sentence? But "Astyages, the _____, had earlier..."/
 * "through Oibares?" Explain!/
 * Fourth sentence begins "For the first time he had gone to his parents" and the rest of the sentence doesn't seem to have anything to do with the first time. Also, is it the first ime ever? I doubt it/
 * Fifth sentence in Background: you begin with "Which"! That is really bad grammar. Also, you use the word "which" three times in the fifth sentence.
 * Sixth sentence: "This confirms the notion that the battle took place months after the revolt, which Cyrus desired to return to his father and fight along side of him" doesn't make sense; the two clauses don't work together./
 * Seventh sentence: "Astyages history changing decision..." what descision? To let Cyprus return to his parents? Elaborate please/
 * In this section, you assume that the reader knows who all these people are! This section really needs a lot of TLC. Make sure you hit Background with some copyeditors before you renominate for GA again./


 * The motives
 * the motives for what?/
 * Sentence ending "since then Astyages was more accepting of Cyrus" is unclear. since when? as time passed, Astyages became more accepting?/
 * The sentence "But he eventually did, at it helped terminate his own kingdom.[22]" has two problems:
 * it begins with "but"/
 * it's worded to suggest that he let Cyrus go because (as) it helped to terminate his kingdom. I think you mean something like "He let Cyrus go, and this led to the termination..."/


 * A lot of the motives is discussing why things happened ("When Astyages was tricked by Harpagus again"), but the reader (me) doesn't know what happened, so it's pointless!/
 * The last sentence in the first paragraph is a huge run-on sentence!/
 * There's a lot more that can be fixed here./
 * Fix the red link ministrel/


 * The battle / Aftermath / the rest
 * This entire article needs a lot of work, so I'm just scanning now. Here are a few things I saw, but there's a lot that needs copyediting/
 * "His true aims he did not communicate to him". Sounds like his goals weren't talking to him./
 * The true aims sentence comes directly from Dunckers book, which displays the 18nds style of writing, and may be an actual translation from Greek to Engish, of Niclaus's original words, which he is main source on the whole battle, so I have to plagarize to make it sound better.--Ariobarza (talk) 19:38, 7 August 2008 (UTC)Ariobarza talk
 * In aftermath, you begin a sentence with And./

Please do not renominate this until you get a lot of people to work on the grammer. Sorry for being a bit harsh, but this is not a GA. Intothewoods29 (talk) 16:20, 6 August 2008 (UTC)

Speedy deletion of "100% pure pressed apple juice"
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I did go ahead with the deletion, as the redirect is somewhat implausible, and may also be confusing even in the event someone did search for it (Odwalla's is not the only 100% juice product, so it may not even be what such a searcher is looking for). Please don't let that discourage you from continuing to be bold in your editing though, just remember that your edits will themselves be reviewed and edited! Happy editing. Seraphimblade Talk to me 06:10, 10 August 2008 (UTC)

'Apple Juice (Odwalla)' listed for deletion
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Siege of Boston
Ok, I'm not sure if it's 100% ready, but I think I got most everything you listed. Red4tribe (talk) 23:28, 11 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Okay, I fixed everything except where you said to expand the background, because I didn't quite understand what you meant. Tell me what you think of it now, Thanks. Red4tribe (talk) 23:28, 13 August 2008 (UTC)


 * I think I might just have it this time. Red4tribe (talk) 03:07, 14 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Thank you for passing it for GA status. Now I have the honor of changing to ✅ on my talk page. Red4tribe (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Oh, thank you very much. Red4tribe (talk) 03:30, 14 August 2008 (UTC)

Load pictures into Wikimedia
I saw you added a picture to the Brio article. Maybe you could also publish it at Wikimedia Commons and add it to the category at: Wooden_toy_trains. Then the image could easily be used at all other language Wikipedias. --T.woelk (talk) 09:59, 13 August 2008 (UTC)

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Irrigation in Peru
Please, let me know if I can help asnwering any question you might have. I would like to have the process cointinuing as soon as possible. Thank you! --anunezsanchez (talk) 13:16, 18 August 2008 (UTC)

GA reviews
Thanks for your review and pass of my Ways and Means (The West Wing)-article. As for 12 basic principles of animation, I'm aware of WP's policy on the use of user-generated sites as sources, however, this particular source gave valuable information not easily found elsewhere, and the article would have suffered from its removal, so I decided just to leave it as it is and not care too much about article status. Lampman (talk) 07:30, 20 August 2008 (UTC)

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L. Patrick Gray
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Odwalla
I have never done a peer review before but I will look it over and see what I can do.-Red4tribe (talk) 16:39, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Hi there. Nice to hear from you after Vanaja. Hope all is well. It was nice of you to ask me for the copyedit, but I lack those skills since I come from a country where English is not the native language. However, I'll take a look at it and see how I can add to the article. However, I would strongly recommend User:Epbr123 for he/she is well-known for copy editing. I recently have requested this user for a copy edit on one article that is on its way to FAC. Hope this helps. Regards, Mspraveen (talk) 17:19, 23 August 2008 (UTC)

Irrigation in Peru GA
Hi! A week ago, I gave second opinion comments on the Irrigation in Peru article in preparation for the article attaining GA status. Since then, there has been no work done on the article by the nominator. My suggestion would be to go ahead and fail the article, with a comment that when all of the recommendations made by myself and another reviewer have been implemented, the article can be renominated. As lead reviewer, the choice of failing or continuing to hold the article is of course up to you, but I just thought I'd drop by and give you my humble opinion *grin*. Thanks! Dana boomer (talk) 13:06, 25 August 2008 (UTC)

Odwalla GAN
You asked, I acted. Don't hate me. --Jeremy ( Blah blah... ) 16:36, 25 August 2008 (UTC)

Yo, ju finished wit' dat? You finish, I GA it... --Jeremy ( Blah blah... ) 10:55, 30 August 2008 (UTC)

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Odwalla FAC
Try hoovers.com and Answers.com, respected business sources. They ought to be able to replace your questionable source. --Jeremy ( Blah blah... ) 02:54, 6 September 2008 (UTC)

Odwalla
Hi, I just saved some fairly extensive changes to the article and I see that you had made some changes too. Do you want me to try to merge in your changes, or do you want *me* to do it? --Macrakis (talk) 17:08, 6 September 2008 (UTC)

By the way, I have some more edits I'd like to perform, but I'll wait for you to finish with yours. --Macrakis (talk) 17:15, 6 September 2008 (UTC)

I'm done with the merge. Could you check the result? By the way, when one source is cited for such a large number of statements in an article, I don't think it makes sense to footnote each instance separately, certainly not multiple times per paragraph. --Macrakis (talk) 18:16, 6 September 2008 (UTC)