User talk:Isaactgisaactg/sandbox

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS I really liked the overall structure of your article; no particular section felt lacking or misrepresented. All of your example sentences were clear and illustrated your point, and I especially liked how you followed up each example with a clear explanation. Many of your sentences could use some re-phrasing for clarity. Some of your information felt repetitive (e.g., I'm not sure you need the sentence beginning your Vowels section, which essentially enumerates the vowels you are about to put in a table anyway). The article felt balanced and easy to follow (besides minor confusing sentences, explained more below).

LEAD SECTION Your lead section was well developed, although I'm not convinced that all of the information you put in the lead was relevant. If this page is for the Gayo language, I'm not sure you need the section on the General Economy of the Gayo people (this is a genuine question I have, such that I'm not convinced one way or the other.) Overall, very well researched and provides interesting context for the information to follow.

SYNTAX SECTION The introduction to this section was, for me, the biggest offender in terms of sentence structure (ironically, since it's about sentence structure!). I think the concepts and terms you're dealing with (actor-oriented, undergoer-oriented, or decontrol undergoer oriented) were difficult for me to grasp, not being familiar with them, and could use a little more explanation or a slightly clearer explanation. However, once I got to your examples, I was able to better grasp them.

PHONOLOGY SECTION As I mentioned before, the introductory sentence felt a little redundant here. However, I felt that this section was especially clear and well-written. I'm not sure you need to split the STRESS section into separate subsections, if you're only going to have one sentence / subheading; but at the same time, it was very clear.

MORPHOLOGY SECTION This section also was a little difficult to follow, and would be greatly improved if you restructure some of your sentences, or split them into multiple sentences. However, each of your subsections was really clear and informative, and portrayed the information very well. A minor complaint: In the Dvandva section, you repeat 'Dvandva' many times – it felt a little odd. But otherwise, a very interesting section, and a good description of a strange phenomenon.

Smmlhck (talk) 00:49, 12 April 2019 (UTC)

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS The amount of work put into this is noticeable. Your language is complex and you did not skimp on any section. Because it was so involved, I think there are places where the explanations went a little too fast or not quite in depth enough, particularly in the syntax section. The lead also felt a bit too long. All the right information is already here, some of it just needs polishing or expanding.

LEAD Very thorough. Compared to the templates we have been following though, I think it may be a little over-involved for our purposes. I would take out the Economy Section because although it is interesting, it has very little to do with the language. The historical section also seems to have very little to do with language until the last three sentences. Also, is 'Bahasa Indonesia' a language or a place? Next, what does the 'immediate Gayo community' refer to (the people in a specific region, the ones who use it as an L1? Etc)? In the first section, I would add the year that it was estimated that 260,000 people spoke it. Something like 'As of 2014, Gayo was spoken by about 260,000 people'. I would add a comma after 'within the Gayo language' and I would replace the comma after 'dialects' with a colon. Can you expand what 'oral literary genre' is; does it mean something like storytelling? You did a lot of work on this and it shows!

SYNTAX Ok, this section is tricky. The concepts are difficult which makes it all the more important that we explain them as clearly as we can. I definitely got a bit lost in the intro to it since the technical words were frequently repeated and the sentences felt kind of borrowed from the book without explaining. I don't think that you contextualized the word order or told us where each part could be in a sentence. Also, define transitive and intransitive verbs or link to them. Maybe: 'Within Gayo sentences, word order falls into two object-final patterns: S V O and V S O. Which one is used depends upon the _______(what is being said and emphasized). Then I think we should get into the actor-oriented, undergoer-oriented etc. because SYNTAX is really about word order and the last two maintain the same word order so I think that might be something to put in a new subsection as 'Decontrol vs Undergoer-oriented' where you can describe the difference more fully without it getting caught up in word order since it does not differ? The explanation of decontrol felt strongest to me. Is there a reason why the language does this division?

PHONOLOGY I would use 'IPA format' instead of 'the IPA'. Great job linking to diphthongs! Your letters are very complicated and I am so impressed by the formatting! I would add links to the IPA letters you can link to (the vowels and simpler consonants?) and I would try to give a little * and note what the diacritics mean in small font below the table (you just need ̚ and l̪ explained. also the comma makes it look like part of the diacritic on the l so maybe add a space?). Amazing though, this must have been a pain to build. Is there a reason the affricates aren't in the table? I might've just missed it sorry. For syllables: the table is perfect! I would put a period or semicolon after disyllabic since it's a new clause that follows. Lexical stress should probably give a brief description of what a mora is.

MORPHOLOGY I think this section is very impressive. You had a lot to explain here and I think you did a great job of it. Maybe explain inflectional affixes and 'illocutionary force'. Adding bolding to the other two particle examples and the Dvandva may be helpful too.

Gracesearle (talk) 02:20, 12 April 2019 (UTC)Gracesearle