User talk:Isabelleb10/sandbox

Chase's reply from google doc
The first and third paragraph in the lead are very well-done. I think the second paragraph is a little too-detailed for the lead and could either be shortened or moved to the plot. You also should have a citation in the last paragraph for the sections like Hulu premiere and banning details.

In your grief section I would put a different qualifier than "scholar" for Barb Dean (also in Search for meaning), maybe tie a publisher to her or university. Additionally you should delete the bold at the end of that paragraph, it's an erroneous detail and has some biased language without citation.

For Coming of age, again you need to further qualify Barb Dean.

In Youth-adult relationships, the first sentence has a large claim without a signal phrase.

Overall your language is very good. I did notice you rested heavily on Barb Dean for citation. You may want to include more varied sourcing between sections, but if it's not available then you should be fine. If you could resolve the (citation needed) areas, I think that'd be very helpful. Your claims are generally well-cited and there is definitely a good gap in knowledge that you are filling. Additionally, your additions flow pretty well with the rest of the page.

William Schott’s evaluation of Isabelle’s additions: Your additions to the lead, reception, and theme sections are very well written and provide great content for the article as a whole. From what I can tell the reviews section previously only held content on the controversy and not reviews themselves. For the review section, I recommend deleting the word positive from the title area as Wikipedia aims for no tone bias. Your work on the lead section is very good and provides excellent context for the rest of the article without going too in-depth. Furthermore, you add much-needed sentences to support the existing content. In regards to the theme section, you made excellent edits supporting the pervious content not only with sentence support but also citation support. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Will Schott (talk • contribs) 20:17, 27 November 2019 (UTC)