User talk:Island.virago/Island.virago

Background on Olive Senior

The background of the author assisted in giving a great introduction and understanding of the author, the background is very clear and does not require any changes to what was already written. I would suggest though that the sentences be made a little longer so that way they hold more meaning and clarity. An explanation of the topic of the short story would give more context to the entire body of work as well.

Introduction

The explanation of the story gives a good enough understanding to give the readers an idea of the story that is being developed, however, there was no mention of an isolated roomk until the explanation of where the boy could possibly be in harm's way. I would suggest giving more context tot e isolated room before jumping into exactly where the boy would be hurt.

Religion

Considering that Rastafarianism is the religion of one of the main characters, it would have been good for the reader/ to be educated on the religion itself and add more context to it from a Caribbean perspective and an outline of the values they have. The sentences "Rastafarianism is also considered a social movement. It begun in Jamaica in the 1930s, it is a combination of Christianity, Protestant, mysticism and pan- African political consciousness.", can be one sentence instead of two, that would add some completion to the statement that's being made. So, it could be changed to "Rastafarianism is also considered a social movement and it begun in Jamaica in the 1930s, it is a combination of Christianity, Protestant, mysticism and pan- African political consciousness."

The two lines after that could also be made into one sentence "The members from the movement reflect mostly from the Old testament in the Bible. They called God 'Jah' and they believe that they are being tested by him through slavery and the existence of economic injustice and racial." This sentence could be change to "The members from the movement reflect mostly from the Old testament in the bible considering that they called God 'Jah' and they believe that they are being tested by him through slavery and the existence of economic injustice and racial." a clear definition of patriarchy is also needed; this would add understanding of the term and explain what it adds to the story.

Power

The section outlined how the use of power can cause anger or inferiority depending on the individual and their life circumstances. “The old man’s power over both the boy and Bro. Justice was perhaps the most interesting case, because on one hand the old man had very little physical control over himself, as evidenced by the fact that "he did not appear to see too well… [And] his mouth trembled”. It would have also been good for the reader/s to be informed that the old man had vision challenges.

Relationship

The second and third sentence here should be corrected to “The old man was cognizant of the fact that the boy found him to be an intriguing character, and he (the old man) exploited the innocence of the boy to forge what was an awkward relationship.” Also, explaining that homosexuality is not the factor here is also an important thing to add to the story, the individual was described as a “young boy” who needed to have guardians, this therefore means that it was more of a paraphilic encounter than just a sexual encounter. Bro. Justice was introduced to that same encounter and that is what made him skeptical of the “Old Man”. So, if that is established then it would add some context to Bro. Justice's discomfort of the “Old Man” having access to the boy.

Survival

The survival explanation can remain as is. There needs to be more references to the article, that would assist in explaining the terms more. CleoKaye (talk) 05:28, 29 March 2021 (UTC)