User talk:Iteachbio27/sandbox

General
You don't need a heading for the whole page. Wikipedia will do that on its own. If you delete that, the table of contents will be organized properly. Sweiner02 (talk) 02:12, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

You'll want to do a much more thorough job of linking in the final draft. Sweiner02 (talk) 02:12, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Good referencing Sweiner02 (talk) 02:12, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

I would recommend more wiki linking in your article. Assume the reader does not have any science background at all and link any relevant science terms, like thrombocytopenia, neutropenia, platelets, hematopoietic, etc... Nlp2015 (talk) 00:23, 25 July 2015 (UTC)

Abstract
Really good overall summary. Sweiner02 (talk) 02:12, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Informative and concise. Nlp2015 (talk) 00:23, 25 July 2015 (UTC)

Mechanism
Nice, clear explanation of x-linkage. Sweiner02 (talk) 02:12, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Easy to understand, if without any previous knowledge. Nlp2015 (talk) 00:23, 25 July 2015 (UTC)

Symptoms
Good, clear description and explanation of symptoms. Nlp2015 (talk) 00:29, 25 July 2015 (UTC)

Diagnosis
Since this is a confusion, it might be useful to explain what distinguishes these conditions. Sweiner02 (talk) 02:12, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

I would explain what symptoms would indicate or confirm the Wiskoff-Aldrich syndrome. Nlp2015 (talk) 00:29, 25 July 2015 (UTC)

Recent research
Obviously, in the final draft you'll summarize these and just reference them like your other citations, but it looks like you found some good articles.Sweiner02 (talk) 02:12, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

This section looks good with a clear overview of what the recent research is focusing on. Nlp2015 (talk) 00:29, 25 July 2015 (UTC)