User talk:Ivana Yizhang Li/Art therapy/Marinarasauce21 Peer Review

I think you've chosen a great topic and so far have some good, useful information. I think the first intro sentence can use some work (right under “Art Therapy and Depression”). The first sentence was a little hard to make sense out of on the first read. I think restructuring could make it more clear or maybe breaking it up into smaller sentences. Secondly, for the client example you can make it more clear that it is an example: maybe label it as so or introduce it as an example. I really enjoyed your “Art Therapy Exercise Instructions” section. I thought it had interesting information organized well and stated clearly. Where the piece is currently at, I think there needs to be more of an introduction and general information regarding art therapy and depression before the Simon example. I also think the piece could benefit from another paragraph between Simon and “What the future holds for art therapy”. There is a long, specific, and detailed example of one client and I think it needs to be directly tied to information on art therapy in a larger sense. Overall, I think you’re off to a good start and I enjoyed reading what you have so far. Marinarasauce21 (talk) 02:35, 5 April 2020 (UTC)