User talk:Iyaec39/Gender disparities in health

Prof. D. Feedback: Hi Irene This is great. And such an important contribution here. I can tell you've done a great deal of work on this. I do see that your citations are not done in the wiki style -- you need to have them come after each sentence that is relevant, repeating as necessary. Let me know if you have questions on this. I'm glad to see the citations you do have, but putting them in with the wikipedia citation manager is really easy, also here's the link to the training module for it https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/training/students/sources. You might notice that near-constant citation is a wikipedia norm in the sense that we need to verify everything. So I'm just a little nervous to not be seeing this yet. I do think your tone is largely appropriate and encyclopedic in style. I wonder if you might just want to create your own sub-section on International perspectives, rather than including it with Management? Also I'd start thinking about the hyperlinking component. --T. Danylevich (talk) 03:42, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

I really like this idea, and think that international perspectives are something that are generally missing from Wiki articles. --Amm567 (talk) 21:23, 13 April 2020 (UTC) Almost every sentence you have written needs an in text citation but I don't see any in here. --Amm567 (talk) 21:23, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

"A potential explanation as to why there are disparate difference in health status and access between genders is due to an un"... this isn't neutral like WIki articles are supposed to be. You should just present the information and allow readers to come to their own conclusions. --Amm567 (talk) 21:23, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

These are the only glaring comments I have. Overall, I think this is extremely well written and clear! Just add citations mainly and that one line i pointed out should be fixed! --Amm567 (talk) 21:23, 13 April 2020 (UTC)