User talk:J.R.Morgan/sandbox

So I assume you plan to insert this content into the Wikipedia page on the Weaponization of Finance (WofF). If so you might coordinate with Matt Gates, Reggie Dublin and Nikya Pfarr who are also working on the topic https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Npfarr/sandbox I would suggest redoing the current WofF article. It's poorly done. See here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Weaponization_of_finance The page needs an outline and major editing. You could then insert your content into the new page. Your content is generally good. The headers are a little unclear. It looks as if you're examples are Russia and the UN. North Korea, like the Ukraine, were targets of WofF. Mcassell04 (talk) 14:26, 14 October 2017 (UTC) Peer Review:

The article is well written and easy to understand, but not over simplified which is good! However, I would recommend adding a title so you can instantly see what's going on and a introductory paragraph to introduce the idea. I think it would be a good idea to expand on the first two sentences you have: "Russia has been known to utilize the [weaponizing] of finance to achieve its political goals on the international stage. Russia's focus has been primarily on implementing sanctions against the pro-Western regimes of former Soviet Union states" and to turn that into an introduction. Also! I'm not 100% sure if you should use "weaponization" or "weaponizing"; weaponization isn't coming up in the dictionary but I think it sounds better but weaponizing is coming up in the dictionary but it keeps saying on here that it's not a word. It's probably not a big deal though!

Overall it's a good article and I'm excited to read it when it's finalized!

Mackenzieburchett (talk) 21:22, 13 October 2017 (UTC)Mackenzie Burchett :-)

Peer Review:

I agree with the above stated review in the way that the information is nicely presented, but a title referring to what the information is relating to would be helpful. The United Nations paragraph, though well written, could benefit from being expanded on when talking about the sanctions imposed on Afghanistan, the Democratic Republic of the Congo, Iraq, Iran, North Korea, and Somalia; such as why and when they were imposed on these specific countries. Regarding the North Korea paragraph, I think it's very well written and explains the points within the paragraph well. Overall, I think this wikipedia article is presented and written nicely.

Ovitanza (talk) 02:06, 14 October 2017 (UTC)Olivia VitanzaOvitanza (talk) 02:06, 14 October 2017 (UTC)