User talk:J.S.Hirsh/sandbox

J. S. Hirsh,

Some of the aspects of your article I think have been done well are the many links to other relevant topics that you included, the overall breakdown of your organization (very clear to follow), and I think you do a good job at defining key terms. I can see you still have a couple sections to write but I think the fact that you included references to specific papers/studies is promising. My only feedback is 1) is the overview your official introduction? If so I would just move it above the table of contents perhaps. Additionally, when writing your other sections I would try and use multiple references just to avoid any bias but you've done a great job at that in what is currently written. Interesting to read as a science major!

Maggie