User talk:JCarter823/sandbox/articledraft

Review
JCarter823, I like your choice of topic, it is an interesting read. Your edits were well written and very formal. I am just confused on the section ‘Early Life and Marriage to Fred West’. In the original article, it includes a good amount of information on Fred West’s marriage to Rosemary and how their relationship begun, but it looks like it is shortened quite a bit. I think the edits you made to that section are much simpler and are straight to the point, but I think a little of the information from the original article could still be included. Overall, I think you improved the article and provided more information on the topic.