User talk:JJones1014

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Hello, JJones1014, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Response
Hi! I wanted to respond on your talk page.


 * This needed editing for tone - it comes across as more of a reflection on the topic as opposed to just a summary of what others have stated on the topic.


 * This is very US-centric. Keep in mind that this is supposed to take a global perspective on the topic and shouldn't focus on one specific country over others.


 * Avoid broad, generalizing statements unless this is a widely held stance that is stated in reliable sources. For example, stating that colleges are getting more diverse may only be applicable for colleges in the United States - this may not be the case in other countries. This is why it's important to be careful with what's added and what's in the sourcing.


 * The sourcing is fine, but since this is meant to take a globalized stance the sourcing should ideally take a globalized stance rather than focusing on a single country or only only a Westernized view.


 * This should be written in the neutral third person - it shouldn't use wording like 'you' and 'we'.

I hope this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:09, 18 March 2020 (UTC)