User talk:JJstudent/Hypercalciuria

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The article looks great, I think with the final additions it will completely cover the topic. As far as edits, in the Lead I would change the line "Patients with hypercalciuria have kidneys that put out higher levels of calcium than normal" to "Patients with hypercalciuria have kidneys that excrete higher than normal levels of calcium into the urine", I think this makes it a little more clear.

Secondly, in the the Causes section I would change the line,

"Idiopathic hypercalciuria is defined as elevated calcium in the urine without identifiable cause despite low to normal calcium intake and normal lab values that could identify another underlying cause."

to, "Idiopathic hypercalciuria is defined as elevated calcium in the urine without an identifiable cause despite low to normal calcium intake and otherwise normal lab values." I added an "an" and took out the last part as it sounds repetitive. WM MED1 (talk) 08:39, 9 March 2023 (UTC)


 * The readability of the article is very good and accessible to non-medical readers. Also good sources!  WM MED1 (talk) 08:42, 9 March 2023 (UTC)