User talk:JKarls8/sandbox

1. The introduction of the article is short and to the point about the author, Nadieh Bremer, which is good as it gives the reader a clear focus on the topic. The list of awards is also a good thing to see as it makes the author more notable. 2. Some changes I would suggest is to name some of the places Nadieh Bremer has spoken around the world and mention some of her more notable visualizations. These should be mentioned in a paragraph about the things she has done such as research to get a better sense of who she is as a data scientist and visualization designer. 3. The most important thing you could add to this article is a research/work section to give more details based on your introduction and with this, you will be adding more citations and in turn more information for the the audience to retain. 4. Some of the things I noticed in this article is the awards section is nicely formatted and has a citation for each one for those who want a deeper understanding. This is something I need to incorporate into my article to strengthen its overall potential. Just keep the to the point sentence structure going and you are well on your way to a finished draft! Tennis12000 (talk) 01:20, 16 April 2020 (UTC)