User talk:JKimura85/sandbox

Lead Section Analysis: Two sentences, could be better. Second sentence is completely un-referred to in the rest of the article, would do well to add more on "August Gutzmer" and "Martin Luther University of Halle-Wittenberg."

Article Analysis: Major points of life left out, especially places she's moved to and people she's interacted with which could help tie this article to others through links. Images exist that could make this article better, but I don't think I have the ability to actually put them on Wikipedia given the training.

References: Everything is pretty well-cited, but adding more than 3 references will help this article just look better. Every fact seems to be referenced by the same link too, so maybe just cutting down on the number of times the reference pops up by wording sentences differently is a task.

Peer Review
I think overall, this article is off to a good start, however I think it could use some expansion in the intro on the relevance of Frieda's work today. What is her legacy? maybe there could even be another section added completely about that? I would also recommend working on overall expansion of the article, especially working to make the Early Life section even with the others. I would also suggest adding an image of Frieda, if able. Overall, keep up the good formatting and sentence structure.

Rileygrace09 (talk) 03:37, 6 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
I think you have a really great start! I looked up the existing wiki page for this individual and I like how you made different categories for her early life and career. This creates a nice flow and clear chronological set up to the page. As for improvements, if there is a little more you can add to the intro-as the other reviewer mentioned-I think that might add to the interest of the whole page. It's still early on though so keep on keeping on, you have a great start!

Mcmoulis (talk) 06:22, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

Response to Peer Review
A "Legacy" section is a great idea, and I'd love to add something like it. I haven't encountered anything in my research so far that would go into a section like that, however. I may look up the websites of the schools she's attended or taught at to see if there's any lasting recognition of her, but there's a good chance those websites will be in German, so I wouldn't want to misrepresent what's stated on them with google translate. A picture of her would be nice too, and there's no shortage of pictures that could be added to this article, but adding pictures to Wikipedia is a bit of a hassle with the copyright rules, so chances are I'm not going to be able to add any of the pictures I find. — Preceding unsigned comment added by JKimura85 (talk • contribs) 02:33, 14 November 2018 (UTC)