User talk:JRGregor

ARTE INFORMALE 1.) "Sometimes referred to as Tachism, Art Autre or Lyrical Abstraction, it was a type of abstraction in which form became less important than that of the expressive impulses of the artist, and was opposed to the rationalism of traditional abstraction." - This sentence could be more concisely structured. For example: "Sometimes referred to as Tachism...it was a type of abstraction that opposed the rationalism of traditional abstraction and that emphasized the expressive impulses of the artist over form." 2.) "The qualities of informal art explore the possibilities of gesture, materials (often non traditional)"- Informal Art should be capitolized, and it would be helpful to specify what you mean by non-traditional materials perhaps by citing a couple of example materials. Someone who is not familiar with art history may not know the difference between traditional and non-traditional materials. 3.) "Often times art characterized as informal is executed spontaneously"- One could technically characterize any art as "informal" as this is a vague term on its own.  Remember that you are referring to a specific movement so you should refer to it as thus.  Otherwise, words like "informal" read as general adjectives 4.) "Arte Informale is based on the institution of painting"- It may be wiser to use the past tense here ("was"). This sentence makes it sound like the movement is still occurring. 5.) "However, they were unable to break away from the history of Italian art."- Elaborate what you mean here, or omit this sentence altogether. 6.) "It was a rejection of the constrained thoughts of previous modern painters." -Something similar was mentioned in the paragraph prior to this one: "They tried to create new channels of communication to create new styles that would reach beyond their predecessors" ; consider combining the two similar ideas into one fluid statement

The different ideas contained in these sentences could be more smoothly connected. Also to give a clearer historical overview, consider providing some more chronological date "markers". You already discussed when the term was coined, but for example, it would have been additionally helpful to provide dates for when Arte Informale began to intersect with other movements you mention (such as Gutai, Arte Povera, and S. American Abstractionists in the late 50s-70s).

Vsmoon (talk) 21:01, 27 March 2013 (UTC)

LUCIO FONTANA
1.) "Lucio Fontana (1899-1968) was one of the key figures of the post-war contemporary art scene in Europe." - Specify which war 2.) "...is best known for his Concetti spaziali (Spatial Concepts)" - What year is this from? 3.) "In 1946 he wrote Manifesto Blanco (White Manifesto) that was signed by a number of his students in Buenos Aires."- This should be further elaborated: what exactly was the manifesto for, what did it achieve? Why does it mark a specific point in Fontana's career? It would also be an effective/useful primary source to site a short excerpt from the actual manifesto here, if you are able to obtain an English version of it. Also the transition to the next sentence in the wiki page feels abrupt, so adding some more information about the Manifesto will hopefully help with that transition. 4.)  "Although Fontana does not identify himself as an informal artist, the language used in his work fits within the qualities of this movement."- Again, be aware of the way that you utilize "informal" as an adjective. It should read "does not identify himself as an Arte Informale artist", or its capitalized, English counterpart

Vsmoon (talk) 22:10, 27 March 2013 (UTC)

"and had ties to the Arte Povera movement.[1]" Please, clarify which are the ties. Great that you include reference, though.PollonApollo (talk) 17:55, 4 April 2013 (UTC)

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