User talk:JSostakas/New sandbox

Peer Review
This needs to be synthesized IN YOUR OWN WORDS and can not just mine citations from one source. Try to weave articles FROM THIS CLASS into the narrative DoctorKarpiak (talk)

Overall well done however there are formatting errors that can be fixed such and comma placement/overuse. The sentence beginning with “Many individuals” could be written better as it currently is quite choppy. Sources need to be cited correctly.DAnthonyRocket (talk) 20:23, 15 November 2018 (UTC)

Good job so far. I think it is a great start. Would agree to source check on some of the claims made from sources since we have noticed some of them to be a bit farfetched in early parts of the article. A paragraph incorporating some of the criticism from our in class authors could be helpful. Citing seems to be ASA. Maybe add a better flow to some of the paragraphs. D.Johnson